Calor character

[Calor]

Basic information:Race:Inarta
Age:20
Birthday:August 13th
Sex:F
Physical description:
5'5", tall for an Inarta, busty, slightly lanky with bright red hair pinned back in a gold clip shaped like eagles wings. Her freckles give her a childlike look and her grass color eyes give her a look of innocence. She's usually smiling.
Character concept:
Caelum (or Cae) Has a easy going laid back approach to life and can't fully understand people who dont have the same outlook on life as her. She loves music, especially bells. She has a hard time reading social situations that are tence or arguments, and has a tendancy to stick her foot in her mouth. She get's very angry at seeing birds harmed or caged up. She has a liking for licorish and a fear of drowning but has allways loved the sea and can swim fairly well
character History
Calor suffered an injury to the head when she was around 14.She woke up as she calls it on August 13th and calls that her birthday in Suvan but because she knows plants from Wind reach, guesses that is where she is from. She has no memory of people or places of her old home but it's never bothered her because no one has ever gone looking for her.
Skill points
20sp-glass blowing
5sp-acrobatics
5sp-agriculture
20sp-Archery
10racial-jewelcrafting
Lore-Poisonous plants in Wind reach
Lore-edible plants in Wind reach
equipment/posessions
simple leather pants, green halter top,battered old leather jacket(once her oldest brothers) shoes, and socks.(starting pkg)
1 shortbow 25 arrows (sp)
Leadger
100 gold (starting pkg)
500-due to not having a home
Thread list
NONE!

[Siren]

Hey there!

I'm Siren, the local and completely harmless Character Sheet Liaison. In order to help you get the most out of your experience on Mizahar, I have taken a look at at your Character Sheet to make sure that everything is up to par!

Unfortunately, there are a few changes that have to be made before we can move forward! Please see the tabs below for details on these issues. Once the issues have been addressed, feel free to send me a private message, let me know you've fixed what I've pointed out and I will gladly remove the intervention!

 

Name

I see that the name on your CS and the name of your account don't match. On Mizahar, we use our usernames as our PC names. On top of that, the name Caelum is already taken. You'd have to choose a surname or just use Calor as your PC's name... or change it all together

 

Birthday

Every PC needs to have a birth day, season and year in which they were born. Just stating an age doesn't cut it.

 

Concept

I suggest you read the Wind Reach and Inarta lore a little better. There are no "Villages" in Wind Reach. The city is on top of and built within a mountain. Furthermore, it's very, very rare for an Inarta to know their parents or be acknowledged by them. That many siblings is still feasible but keep in mind that it would be VERY out of the ordinary for them to all live together or even know each other.

Also keep in mind that it is also very rare for an Inarta to just decide to leave their city. Open skies and free reign of their mountain isn't really a caged atmosphere.

 

Skills

Your skills are set up incorrectly. Please take a look at the information below for more help.

After a recent meeting with several of the Storyteller Staff and Founders, we have decided to Officially Change a policy regarding Skill Points in the Character Sheets. You must now display all Starting Points, Racial Bonus Points, and Earned Points separately from one another. Storytellers and Liaisons will now be Intervening on Character Sheets that fail to make this change.

Examples

Skills	Exp	Total	Proficiency
Auristics	15 SP, 72 XP	87	Master
Seduction	18 SP, 3 XP	21	Novice
Glassworking	10 RB, 12 SP, 35 XP	57	Expert
Intelligence	5 SP	5	Novice
Sewing	13 XP	13	Novice
Weapon: Javelin	1 XP	1	Novice
Acrobatics	85 XP	85	Master

SP = Starting Points
RB = Racial Bonus Points
XP = Earned Experience Points


Example 2:

Auristics: 87/100 (15 SP)
Seduction: 21/100 (18 SP)
Glassworking: 57/100 (10 RB) (12 SP)
Intelligence: 5/100 (5 SP)
Sewing: 13/100
Weapon, Javelin: 1/100
Acrobatics: 85/100


Notice how the Starting Points, Racial Bonus Points, and Earned Experience Points are all notated differently. This allows Storytellers and other staff to review your Character Sheet more accurately, and ensure that everything is accurate and up to date.

 

Lores

Lores are meant to be little pieces of what your PC knows. "Sewing" is not a proper lore because it is an actual skill. "How to Cross Stitch" or "How to untangle thread" would be a lore, because it supplements the skill and cannot be expanded upon.

 

Ledger

You have extra items within your PC's possession but they are not deducted from your ledger. Please keep track of what you purchase and make sure you deduct the price listed in the Price List from your Ledger.

 

Housing

You have listed no housing nor have you taken the 500GM in your ledger for turning in housing. Also, your PC can't be travelling the Suvan without a boat of some kind.

Write on!
-Siren