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There are a few things to polish up on your CS so it shines like a star. Let’s work out the kinks so you can get back to writing and roleplaying to your heart’s content.
1. Age: If you would like Casius to be 22 years old, he would need to be born in 494 AV.
2. History: There is a bit of a disconnect with the sudden death of his parents and his reaction to their death. He hardly seems affected by the event and yet he considers Family to be of utmost importance. Additionally, it seems strange for a house to suddenly catch fire with no means of escape. Kitchen fires could occur, but one could probably manage to escape through the door. However, if you’d like to hint at foul play, then it might be more believable.
3. Language: Would you like to include a basic and/or poor language as part of your starting package? If so, please explain how he learned it. If not, then that is perfectly acceptable too. Just take out the “Fill me in” text.
4. Longbow: Please indicate this skill as “Weapon: Longbow” to be consistent with how people label these skills on Mizahar.
5. Wilderness Survival: As someone who is competent at wilderness survival, you get one primary terrain and one secondary terrain in which you are knowledgeable in. Terrains/biomes include: forest, mountains, plains, swamp, ocean, desert, etc. I gather that his primary terrain would be forest, but you can also select a secondary terrain at this time. Please note it somewhere (for example with an asterisk *)
6. Possessions: Please choose a Coat OR Cloak.
7. Housing Location: Please revise the spelling of Syliras. Don’t worry, lots of place names to learn.
I look forward to seeing a new follower to Caiyha in and around Syliras.
Once you have made the necessary changes, please PM / Private Message me (using the envelope button) and I'll remove this intervention. I'm also happy to answer any questions you may have.
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