Worst Sentence you have ever written

by **Fela Meason** on July 9th, 2011, 6:23 am

Ok, We've all had some flops. Those sentences that make you cringe and you regret tapping out the moment they leave your keyboard? Come on, we can't be perfect all the time. Well I want them. I want your bad, your mediocre or downright strange. Doesn't have to be from this site, just any thing you have ever written that was just downright bad, I want it. Let's laugh together. Let the healing begin.

(All people here who have done NanoWrimo know what I am talking about, and they can be pretty darn funny)

One of mine from a short novella I wrote granted me membership into the redundancy club:

I noticed the tall one first, his bright red hair reminded me of flames licking at the base of a home being consumed by flames.

by **Ronan** on July 9th, 2011, 10:33 am

Whenever I write anything cliche like...

"his heart felt like it would pound out of his chest"

or that other classic

"he looked at her. It felt like electricity."

Eurrghhh.

by **Fela Meason** on July 9th, 2011, 10:34 pm

Ha, I love cliches. My work is literally littered with them (along with alliteration). I am the cheese master, I was editing a novella I had worked on about a year ago and this gem popped out at me. The worst part is that is the closing line of the novella.

This wasn't the end, oh no, this was just the beginning of a long game of cat and mouse, only catch was we hadn't picked our pieces yet.

I find this stupid because my main character is trying to sound all bad and that he is ready for the bad guy to come back for round two. So why the heck would be want to be the mouse?! One would assume you would not desire to be the hunted. -.-

by **Whisper** on July 13th, 2011, 3:43 am

Actually a new line from the first flashback I had for my new PC. This PC to be exact.

"The door gave its squeak once more and a click to notify it fully shutting and the sound of old tumblers locking into place sounded soon after."

After going back and reading it, I saw that it was the most pointless line ever...

by **Fela Meason** on July 13th, 2011, 5:54 am

I'm going to be here a lot I'm finding. Worst paragraph ever written.

The next day Mitch and I had to go to class, there was no getting out of it today. It was Wednesday again, a whole week had passed since that day in the diner, the day everything went to hell in a hand basket. So that meant more Biology class in a room full of plants. Oh joy.
The room was buzzing with conversation when I walked in. I guess houseplants don't normally have such a large gathering in domestic situations.
In the space of an hour I didn't learn any of the class material but I did learn that Maggie was looking a little yellow around the stems, Henry was on his last leg and wouldn't make it through the week, Ginger was new and had a massive attitude and that Ranee and Charles were star crosses lovers doomed to forever stare at each other from across the classroom. Tragic stuff I tell you.