Completed [Bronze Woods] I Hate The Dark I Really Do (Fubuki Kouri)

Kise is out in the bronze woods because of K's mistakes. Separates from his group accidentally and meets a ghost?! Oh my...

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Stretching northward along the coastline of the Suvan Sea, the Cobalt Mountains are the home of the Bronze Wood, numerous ruins, and creatures both strange and fantastical.

[Bronze Woods] I Hate The Dark I Really Do (Fubuki Kouri)

Postby Kisetukai on April 13th, 2013, 1:08 am

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"Hey I was pretty awesome huh-..." Kise said as his voice faded away. As Kise turned to face the girl, he noticed a distressed face, full of pain and worry. He was expecting congratulations and props, not a look of a monster, was he that scary looking? "Kouri?..Are you-" Kise was interrupted as he heard a growl bigger than anything he ever experienced. This automatically caused him to flinch, flailing his hands up, and covering his head as if hoping to block whatever it was. "Agh-" Before he could even get his scream out the beast beat him to the punch, letting out a distress sound of death as he heard a thud. Turning around he saw...

A giant wolf, or at least that's what he called it. A huge wolf, laying on the floor, stabbed by...That dagger. That dagger that almost stabbed him earlier...That dagger that he hated. That dagger that..

Saved his life.

"Petch! I guess I should pay more attention to-..." He once more was interrupted as he turned, to see what was left of Kouri...Causing his jaw to drop, exposing his warm heated mouth to the cold elements of the earth. "Kouri..." He said softly as he raised a hand, hesitating, he quickly lowered it back to his side. "Sir...Kise..." Said the mist in her soft voice. Seeing he like this...Hearing her like this. Immediately his face filled with tears, strolling down his cheeks, making their way to the floor shining in the soft moonlight. "Your...Friends...Are...Coming." She said softly, that small tired smile she gave, before she faded out of sight. "Thank you..." Kise said as he wiped his tears, returning the favor, giving his normally cheeky smile now covered in shine from tears.

To think that a ghost...He had made friends with a ghost. He bowed quickly at her finally, and turned around hoping she was happy, for he thought she was dead. "Kouri...What a sweet little-" Kise's sad little voice was turned around as he heard the sharp stern voice of K. "Ghost can't die dumb petch." K said with an arrogant voice. "So you mean?" Kise quickly blurted out. "Yup...Your girlfriend isn't dead...Just tired." K said as his voice faded off. This sent Kise jumping into the air for joy, smiling harder than ever, his sad spirit was quickly enthused. "Wait..." He said realizing what his brother had actually said. 

She's not my girlfriend!

Out of nowhere as if following his voice, Kise was greeted by his group. "Aye! There's the boy." Shouted one knight. "Finally!" Kise looked at them all clueless, having just remembered he was on a patrol. "I'm sorry I was lost..." Kise said shyly. "Well...Let's get back to patrol." Before he could even walk, he was stopped by another knights hand. "Neigh boy. Patrol is done...If I may ask what were you doing?" As Kise and the group began to walk home everyone looked at him intently. "I was just keeping company to myself..." He said with a nervous chuckle, walking home to dismiss the group. "You know...They say ghost roam these woods...Did you perhaps by any chance-" This caused Kise to remember the kiss that young Kouri had planted on him, out of everything, why that?! The knight was cut off as Kise raised his hand. "Please..." Kise said with an annoyed look as he continued walking, blushing a bit. 

"I hate the dark...I really do."
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[Bronze Woods] I Hate The Dark I Really Do (Fubuki Kouri)

Postby Cloud on April 30th, 2013, 2:27 am

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From the sky falls your reward!

Kisetukai :
Experience
Skill | XP Earned
Boxing | +2
Unarmed | +2
Tactics | +2
Intimidation | +2
Interrogation | +1
Observation | +1
Socialization | +2
Lores
| Lore Earned
• | A Ghost's Presence: Cold as Ice
• | Insulting a Ghost to Pass On
• | Kouri's Tragic Demise
• | Being The Mature Brother


Remember our discussion and that'll count as your notes. ;) The way you write you take risks, your word usage is bold and in this thread it pays off. Good work!


Fubuki Kouri :
Experience
Skill | XP Earned
Materialization | +2
Soulmist Projection | +3
Possession | +1


Lores
| Lore Earned
• | Haunting Out of Boredom
• | Kisetukai the Martial Artist
• | Tormented By Insults
• | Kisetukai's Multiple Personalities
• | Interrogated the Most Foul Manner
• | Everybody Needs Someone

Kouri your writing style is unique, but some of it is a tad bit excessive. Don't worry on exagguration too much, and a little review of your posts to check for minor errors can help pay off! :) That being said you did good as well. Keep it up! I couldn't award many points in possession as Kouri hardly demonstrated the ability. Still it was unique to see her enter the mind of Kise.


Misc? :
Kise suffers minor injuries from the bite marks, but a little patchwork and he's fine. (Be glad one of those wolves wasn't going rabid. ;))

Kouri has to replenish her soul mist which requires plenty of rest. She'll find her projection with her soulmist is a bit shakey for a couple of days.


Creativity went into this thread, and I loved it! Some of it was a bit out of play as far as the combat, but it took an interesting twist. Good work you two!

Question marks to be made? Exclamations to declare? Feel free to send me a pm and we can tend to any concerns you have.
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