Bitter Wind (Jasmine)

[Colt]

Shahar scanned the shore quickly; signs of passage stood out starkly now that the grass had turned brittle, and tracks remained much longer. Ah, there; a well-worn rabbit trail snuck beneath a bush. It was a bit ragged, but that could be attributed to the season; everything traveled as little as possible when winter came upon them.

“There hasn’t been anything big around here for days.” Shahar turned and discovered that the Moonstone had crossed the stream. Why?

He waited for her to be done with her words, then gave a decisive unnecessary. It was not a rudely given sign, but there wasn’t any politeness in it, either. It was blunt and emotionless in delivery, similar to his posture when he turned back to the trail. He didn’t know exactly what qualified as a “big thing,” but he did not give much thought to it; he had small things to find right now.

[Jasmine Stormblood]

"Well I hope you find what ever you may be hunting," Jasmine said with a smile. She knew that there had been a good mess of rabbits around the are. The hunters had not found anything bigger than the occasional hare which is only slightly bigger than a rabbit. Jasmine stepped back across the stream and put her staff back on her saddle before mounting up again. 'May we meet again' She signed and clicked her tongue gently. "Time to get back big boy," Jasmine said with a smile to Chaser.

[Colt]

Though Shahar heard the woman’s well wishes, there was nothing he said or did in acknowledgement. He remained fixed upon the rabbit trail, noting the degree of use, how sharply the overhanging bush bent around it, how fresh the tracks were––it had been used three times today at least, but they had been used recently; he would not be able to find any more on this day. It did, however, suggest that a trap here would prove fruitful, and so Shahar straightened and turned.

The woman had crossed back over the stream, and he followed suit. Akaidras pricked his ears and Shahar gave him an affectionate rub on the forehead, but did not mount; with practiced fingers, Shahar loosed the covering of the yvas bags and retrieved a snare. After a moment of thought, he retrieved a strip of dried meat to chew on as he walked back towards the creek.

He caught the signed goodbye and gave a gruff acknowledgement. She had her own things to do; this spot by the stream did not seem to hold any reason for her to stay. Akaidras watched after the retreating pair curiously, but Shahar did not give so much as a second glance; this meeting was done and would quickly be forgotten. He had his own business to attend to.

[Translucent]

Congratulations On Your Hard Work!

Shahar Dawnwhisper:
XP:+1 hunting, +2 observation, +1 socialization, +1 tracking
Lores:Hunting: Animals gather at water sources. Chaser: A spirited Strider

Jasmine Moonstone:
XP:+1 riding, +2 observation, +2 socialization
Lores:Racing against the wind

Notes: Just a note here, welcome to Endrykas Jasmine The more detail you put into actions, the more grading points you will receive. This is an example that will get you one point in riding :
….Jasmine clung to Chase’s back with her knees, her body straight as her hands raise to catch the wind. The horse beneath her body galloped and instinctively her body moved with the horse. Her right knee presses against the side of Chaser urging him to turn right…

A post that won’t get a point in riding though she is riding a horse :

Jasmine rode her horse.

Grading is something that will take time to get used to. It took me a while to get used to writing for grades rather than writing just for the story. This by no means is a critique, or something that you have to do. It is just posted here to help you know how to get higher grades. 

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