[Issues found by Crosspatch] Ulysses Caldevera

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Ulysses Caldevera

Postby Ulysses Caldavera on January 7th, 2014, 12:31 pm



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Name: Ulysses Caldavera
Sex:Male
Age: 16
Race: Human
Height:5" 10
Eyes: Dark brown, almost black
Hair Color: Jet Black
Birthday: 497 AV 44th of Fall

Physical Description

Ulysses has back-length, jet dark hair that falls along his back. He has large eyes laced with long feminine eyelashes and a relatively long and thin nose which, in combination with his dark eyes give him a rather severe gaze. His mouth is small and full, almost seductive and the redness of them contrast greatly with his pallid skin tone. He is not tall, but not short either, standing at a five feet and ten inches, in fact, he probably still has a ways to go in terms of growth. He is lean though not very well-built though he has good arm strength due to years of hunting with a bow.

Character Concept

Personality
Ulysses is calm, collected and with composure. He is generally a very relaxed person who prefers to think things straight especially before delving into complicated issues. He is observant where others fail and likes to read people based on their actions towards him and other people. Due to being more introverted he isn't very charismatic and more than one person has turned him away from a job, usually with a snide comment about his cold exterior. However, Ulysses cares greatly about people and will go to great lengths to help people that earn his trust. Very few things anger him and when they do his cold exterior seeps straight in and it would be best to stay out of his way at times when his spleen has been vented.

Ethics

When it comes to Ulysses he has fluid morals and ethics, growing up in a poor family he has had his own share of hardship and he has had to resort to stealing more than once to feed himself. He would be best described as chaotic neutral as he will do what it takes to make sure he makes it through the night and will also do the same for people that he admires or cares about. He also despises waste, whether it is the waste of food, the waste of resources and even the waste of life, this is due to an enlightening experience he had in obtaining his Gnosis mark from Dira, the Goddess of death.

Likes

Ulysses enjoys peace of mind and likes to meditate, his favorite place to meditate would be in a graveyard as he can feel the tranquility of the resting dead there. His favorite food is fresh red snapper from the Suvan Seas and he also enjoys company with people that he admires. He also likes to take the initiative and has good leadership skills to back it up. He also likes the falling leaves as he was born in the fall.

Dislikes

He dislikes the waste of any mundane thing. His least favorite food is beef of any sort. He also dislikes the snow and being cold.


Backstory :
Ulysses is the son of a widowed mortician who's wife died after a long battle with degenerative disease when Ulysses was 15. With no other children and dwindling resources Ulysses father was forced to encourage his son to leave home and school in Zeltiva to the city of Syliras in the hopes of finding better income.

Interestingly enough however, Ulysses was not trained in the ways of a mortician. Food was scarce for them with most of the money funnelling into his education. Most of the time, Ulysses would be given the job of hunting for food outside of the city of Zeltiva and he quickly learnt how to make traps, shoot a bow and fletch arrows from the books he borrowed from the University of Zeltiva's libraries.

After braving a long journey on a rented horse Ulysses will finally arrive in Syliras.



Skills :
Weapon Proficiency: Short Bow 25/100 +15 Racial +10 SP
Fletching 5/100 +5 SP
Hunting10/100 +10 SP
Larceny 5/100 +5 SP
Meditation 10/100 +10 SP
Running 5/100 + 5 SP
Leadership 5/100 +5 SP
Last edited by Ulysses Caldavera on January 10th, 2014, 10:55 am, edited 3 times in total.
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Ulysses Caldevera

Postby Ulysses Caldavera on January 7th, 2014, 3:04 pm

Lore :
Lore- Life, Death and the Balance between
Lore- Anatomy of a Short bow


Possessions :
Family Shortbow Large Tent Large Tarp 100 ft of rope
Flint & Steel 2 Torches Bedroll Blanket
Fishing Tackle & Hooks Compass WaterSkin
Backpack Toiletries Food For 1 Week Eating Knife
Flint and SteelDraft Horse Full set of Tack


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Last edited by Ulysses Caldavera on January 10th, 2014, 11:17 am, edited 5 times in total.
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Ulysses Caldevera

Postby Ulysses Caldavera on January 7th, 2014, 3:06 pm


Clothing :
Simple Shirt Simple Boots Simple pants
Simple Underwear Simple Coat


Languages :
Common - Fluent
Fratava - Basic



Ledger :

Item Expense Income
Starting Funds 0 100
Total 0 100 Golden Miza's
Last edited by Ulysses Caldavera on January 10th, 2014, 11:30 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Ulysses Caldevera

Postby Crosspatch on January 9th, 2014, 9:48 am

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Hello there!

I'm Crosspatch, one of the friendly CS Liaisons on Mizahar! I've been looking over your Character Sheet, and I have noticed some minor issues that need to be resolved and fixed. Sadly these need to be done before you can continue roleplaying, so let's take a look at them shall we?

  • If you wish to have a gnosis please apply for it on the help desk and link your story teller’s secrets to your profile.
  • Marksmanship does not count as a valid skill, nor does swiftness. A weapon skill is specific to a weapon, for example to fire a shortbow one would need the skill "Weapon: Shortbow." By swiftness do you mean skills like Acrobatics or Running?
  • Your character sheet mentions having good Leadership skills and Hunting with the bow - yet you do not have points in either to back this up.
  • It is required that you clearly state which skills are Starter Package (SP) skills and which are Racial Bonus (RB).
  • Can you please specify what you mean by the lore "Basic Guide to the Bow and Arrow" for it feels far too broad. Do you mean something along the lines of "Anatomy of a shortbow"?
  • I am curious as to see where you have managed to gain 300 GM from on your ledger. At creation one starts with 100 GM and a starting housing option to chose from. Judging by your possessions your have chosen the Travel Housing which includes a horse - cashing it in is not an option.
  • Please list all your starting clothing items. This consists of; a simple shirt, simple pants, simple boots, simple undergarments and a simple cloak or coat.

Once these problems have been dealt with, drop me a PM and I'll remove this intervention and approve your CS for you. Also if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask and I'll do my best to answer!


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