Thereon

[thereon]

Name: Thereon
Race: Ghost
Age: 76 (not counting human years of which he has 53)
Gender: male
Height: 6 ft. 5 in.
Weight: Do I need to say he has none?
color ethereal blue
Eye: sunken in, pinpoints of blue.
Features: gash in side shows ribs, eye patch on his left eye.
Area: Zinrah
Concept: After Dhani cannibals attacked him, killing him with a cooking knife, He vowed revenge on all of Zinrah. He became a ghost, and used this to kill off his enemies.
Major flaw: sentimental when not murderous.
Heirloom: his old eyepatch, it is a reminder of his rough childhood.
Home: an old ruined cave outpost, (cottage) with a: table, hearth, chair, bunk and chest.
Skill: 10 Possession, 10 soul mist projection, 10 drawing,
5 materialization (+10 racial), 20 persuasion, and 5 speed.
Lore: Lore-endurance, Lore-think it over.
Languages: poor Isur, basic Nard, fluent zithanese.

That's all folks!

[Traverse]

Hello Thereon, as the main overseer of Zinrah I noticed a few stumbling points with your CS that need to be worked out before you can continue forward in our forums:

Firstly Mizahar has a strict naming policy that can be found here. You'll need to edit your name in your profile and capitalize it in order to comply with this.

In addition to your race, age, etc we need to know the precise date of your PC's birth (day, season, and year). It is also helpful in terms of ghosts to list their race before they became a ghost, you mention 'human years' but not specifically that he was human, so just clarifying that would be dandy.

Appearance: Ghosts do not have skin, nor the ability to wear any garments, you mention wearing an eye patch and it is also listed as an heirloom. As a ghost you can say that Thereon appears with an eyepatch covering one eye, but he would not be able to physically carry or wear the eyepatch without it taking up a good deal more energy than it's worth.

Concept: You say that Thereon was killed by cannibals and now swears revenge on Zinrah, but the cannibals in Falyndar are Myrians who live in Taloba vs. the Dhani in Zinrah, so a little clarification is needed here. Also is Thereon was a human when he was living you'll need to explain precisely how he got so far into Falyndar without dying first.

Skills: All PC's start with 60 starting points, you have 50 listed and Throwing, Speed, Ponder, and Soulmist recovery are not actual skills. As a ghost you start with 10 points as a racial bonus in Materialization, one of the three most important skills for a Ghost the other two being Soulmist Projection, and Possession. For reference the skill list can be found here.

These things will need to be fixed before you can proceed, and from the nature of this CS as well as your first post in Zinrah that there are some serious discrepencies between what you are describing your ghost as doing and what their lore states. I would take your time re-reading the Ghost lore as well as looking over your starting guide PMed to you upon joining the site as you are editing your CS. If you have any questions or concerns while working on this feel free to PM me.