[Note by Crosspatch] Eloimaya Brookside

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Eloimaya Brookside

Postby Eloimaya Brookside on January 19th, 2015, 10:01 pm

Eloimaya Brookside


Appearance
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Race: Drykas
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Birthday: 56, Winter, 498.
Birthplace: Syliras

Appearance: Eloi is five foot seven inches and she weighs around one-hundred and thirty pounds. Her hair is a shocking orange that falls to her waistline. She normally braids her hair a new way each day. Her skin is pale ivory and speckled with brown freckles. She has a round-shaped face and bright blue eyes that look like a cloudless sky. She normally wears white and blue because of her parent's influence. She has her ears pierced and a swirling blue hurricane gnosis mark on her lower back. She loves to bead her hair and takes at least an hour a day on her hair. She keeps her father's trusty sword on her side at all times. Eloi only likes to wear boots because they are easier to run and ride in. Eloi likes to paint her lips with crushed flowers and fruits to give them a 'red' appearance. Eloi's windmarks stretch down her upper right forearm to wrist.

Character Concept

Eloi is cautious. After finding out her grandmother killed her parents because they didn't follow orders, she has decided to trust few. Eloi will help anyone who asks for help because she knows how horrible being lonely and powerless feels. Eloi is optimistic about the future and easily gets along with everyone. Eloi likes to try new things whether it be a new skill or food, she is always willing.

Eloi is short-tempered for someone who wields a sword. She's known for lashing out on someone who said her hair looked 'funny.' Eloi is also a loud-mouth person who seems to not understand social cues. She will always share her opinion and isn't afraid to stand up for what she believes in. Even with these short comings, Eloi is a kind person who only wants to help those in need. Eloi doesn't fall in love easily. So far, Eloi hasn't really found someone she likes or what type of person she likes. Her head just isn't in the clouds.

Character History

Eloi was born in Syliras on a snowy day mid-winter with the gnosis of Zurlav. Her parents raised her speaking both Pavi and Common although Eloi preferred Pavi. Each night, her parents would take turns telling her breath taking tales from the land the came from known as "The Sea of Grass". Soon, Eloi longed to see her parents homeland and begged them to take her there. This made her parents concerned for the fact that they had both left their clans, her father a strong webber of the sapphire clan and her mother, a ferocious warrior of the diamond clan had abandoned their home to be together. After two years of begging, Eloi's parents decided to head back to the Sea of Grass in hopes that they could show their daughter what she wanted to see then leave quickly after.

The day they were supposed to leave Eloi got very sad. Her parents were confused and asked what was wrong. She said she had a bad feeling about the weather and both her parents exchanged a knowing glance. Their trip was held off a week by a wicked storm that over took Syliras. Finally, on the eighth morning when the rain let up, the trio left for the Sea of Grass.

It was three days into their trip when Eloi, who was hugging her father as they rode his strider heard a strange whooshing noise. She looked up in horror to see that an arrow had pierced through her mother's chest as she fell off her horse. She let go of her father, barely able to keep balance on the horse when there was another loud swooshing sound. Looking up, she saw an arrow had pierced throw his chest as well and he was beginning to fall as well. She screamed and the horse slowed it's pace as her father fell to the ground. She noticed that the Yvas that was holding him up had been cut clean through with an arrow. Scared, Eloi grabbed on to the strider's main for her life and the horse reared up, knocking her onto the ground. She hit her head hard and blacked out.

Eloi woke up to the smell of cinnamon and citrus. An old lady was looking at her, with curious eyes. The two talked for a bit and the old lady started to cry when Eloi told her that her father had died as well. The lady said she was Eloi's grandma and that from now on she would take care of the orphaned child. So Eloi grew up in the sapphire clan, wearing all blue and speaking Pavi. One day her grandma took her into her father's old room and showed her an old sword. She explained that it had belonged to her mother and then showed her how to web to her mother's first sword. Eloi could barely see her father's name above the web but it was there, his mother and father's first connection. From that day on Eloi practiced webbing with her grandma.

While Eloi practiced webbing she got her windmarks from taming her first strider, Aja. Aja was a fierce black strider who was known amongst the sapphire clan as one that wouldn't be won over. Eloi decided to test that theory. One day while her grandma was busy with chores, she snuck off and found Aja. The strider saw her and began to back away, fear in it's eyes. Eloi took out one of the cookies that tasted like the ones her father used to make and held it out to the strider. Aja sniffed the air and cautiously came over. After a lick, the strider ate the whole cookie in one bite. Eloi laughed and pet Aja. After that, Eloi put on the Yvas with deft speed and jumped ontop of Aja. The ride was wild. Aja swerved and reared but Eloi didn't let go. When Eloi and Aja returned to camp, Eloi was awarded her windmarks.

Her life from then on was easy and she was beginning to see webs more often. Though she realized that her powers weren't anywhere close to her grandmother's. One day, while Eloi was cleaning the dishes, she overheard her grandma talking to a strange man. Curious, Eloi decided to listen into their conversation. The old man wanted more hush money for... for killing her parents! Eloi was shocked, mortified that the woman who had taken her in could do this to her! Without a second thought she took her strider, Aja, and took off.

On her first knight Eloi ran into a knight from Syliras. The two stuck up a deal that if Eloi taught him how to ride striders that he would teach her how to handle her mother's sword. For two months, the two practice and taught and before Eloi knew it, they were almost to Syliras. One day, the knight and Eloi stopped at a nearby beach to take a rest when Eloi noticed a lot of people wearing strange clothes. On further investigation she found out they were Svefra.

One svefra boy in particular kept taunting Eloi, so much so that she chased after him and before she realized it she was in over her head with water. She started to thrash and splash, desperately trying to grasp on to something, anything.Just when she thought all hope was lost, an arm reached down with the tattoo of waves on it and grabbed her. While she was being pulled up she thought she saw the tattoo move. Once she surfaced she saw it was the boy who had been making fun of her. He apologized thinking that a stormwarden would know how to swim. She asked him what that was and he explained the religion to her and pointed out her gnosis, then his.

After that the two became good friends and she spent a week with them learning how to swim before the knight decided it was time to go. A month later Eloi and the knight finally reach the entrance to Syliras, it's Eloi's sixteenth birthday as she enters the city to see what her future holds in store for her.

Language

Fluent Language: Pavi
Basic Language: Common
Poor Language: Fratava

Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Sword Fighting 20 SP 20 Novice
Webbing 15 SP 15 Novice
Swimming 5 SP 5 Novice
Endurance 10 SP 10 Novice
Horse Riding 10 RB 10 Novice


Lores

Helpful Lores:
Lore of Sea of Grass Geography
Lore of Magic: Webbing


Possessions

1 Set of Clothing
-Simple white Shirt
-Simple blue Pants
-Simple white Undergarments
-Simple blue Cloak or Coat
-Simple white Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Bone)
-Brush (Bone)
-Soap
-Razor
-Balanced Rations (1 Week’s Worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
100 Gold Mizas

Heirloom: Father's basic silver sword

Housing

Location: Syliras

House:1 large tent (4 person)
1 large tarp
100 ft of rope
1 lantern
2 torches
1 bedroll
1 blanket
1 set of fishing tackle & hooks
1 bonded Strider
1 Yvas
1 large set of Yvas bags

Ledger

Purchase Cost Total
Starting +100 GM 100 GM


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Eloimaya Brookside
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Eloimaya Brookside

Postby Crosspatch on January 24th, 2015, 9:13 am

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Hello there!

I'm Crosspatch, one of the friendly CS Liaisons on Mizahar! I've been looking over your Character Sheet, and I have noticed some minor issues that need to be resolved and fixed. Sadly these need to be done before you can continue roleplaying, so let's take a look at them shall we?

  • If you have not done so already, please make sure to apply for your Gnosis on the Help Desk and link your SS thread to your profile once you have gained permission.
  • The skill "Sword fighting" is not a valid skill. Weapon skills specific to what is being used, and are labelled as "Weapon: Weapon name”.
  • Please change your skill "Horse Riding" to "Riding: Horse".
  • Why did Eloimaya's parents leave their clans? Why did they leave their pavilions and homeland? This is a very rare thing to occur among the Drykas and would not just happen on a whim. Please expand upon this.
  • You cannot leave the sea of grass and go travelling if you have webbing as a skill at creation. This is due to the cultural reasons of it being a Drykas locked skills, and that the webbers are always needed to tend to the Web in the sea of grass - simply they would not be allowed to leave. Please take this into consideration with your skills and your history.
  • Your "Lore of Magic: Webbing" is too broad for a lore. A lore is some form of general knowledge that the character has gained over their lifetime. Such as knowledge on a particular deity or knowing the layout of a particular city.
  • Please choose a cloak or coat. You cannot have both.
  • I will leave this more as a simple statement; silver is a very soft metal, and thus would not be good for a sword, it would be more as an ornamental weapon than one to actually fight with.
  • It should also be noted that it can take more than just several days to travel to and from the Sea of Grass, and that wandering and travelling the land without any points in Wilderness Survival is strongly discouraged. Please take this into consideration.

Once these problems have been dealt with, drop me a PM and I'll remove this intervention and approve your CS for you. Also if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask and I'll do my best to answer!


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