Jamous Azaria

[Jamous Azaria]

Name: Jamous Azaria
Race: Human, Male
Age: 21, Summer 493
Location: Ravok
Physical Description:
At 6"2 Jamous towers over many of the other races! He has brown hair and blue eyes which always have a mysterious glint in them! He prefers to keep his hair short in order that it doesn't get in his way! Lanky, but tall Jamous has developed some muscle! Jamous stands tall,never walking with a slouch.
Personality:
Jamous is inherently curious, which can often cause him trouble. He also tries to be funny, but he can sometimes say the wrong words at the wrong time! He is not shy at all, often walking up and introducing himself to random people! He is very intellgent but lacks common sense! He lacks courage,so he wouldn't be the top choice for dangerous quests or long adventures. Outcast, Jamous is anything but normal! He prefers to think problems out in his mind rather than speaking or writing them out! Jamous is easy-going and rarely gets angry, but when he does, all hell breaks loose! Scam artists ay think that they can scam Jamous because of his personality, but Jamous has never let that happen!
Character Concept:
Jamous is human who wants to become known as a great tinkerer, but he has never made friends due to his obsession! Jamous will build objects and enchant them with Animation. He doesn't have much courage... Yet.. Jamous wants to make the Mizahar a better place to live with his creations! His main goal in life is to impact the world greatly, and have his name recorded in history books! Mastering Animation and learning about other skills in magic also interest Jamous!
Background and History:
Born in Ravok, Jamous had a fairly normal childhood, as normal as it could be in Mizarah. His father was a carpenter who worked hard to provide for Jamous's education! His mother was a bartender at various restaurants who worked hard and provided for them! Jamous wants to earn as much a he can and work as hard as possible! At school, Jamous was introduced to a professor who had a golem! This professor took Jamous under his wing, teaching him Animation! Jamous became obsessed with furthering his understanding in this mysterious form of magic! It was all to easy to read about Animation, but doing it. Thats a whole nother world in and of itself! The kindly professor took Jamous underneath his wing, literally he was part bird, and versed him in the begginning ways of Animation. Afterwards, Jamous enlisted the help of his father, Billos, to teach him Carpentry,in order that Jamous could begin building and Animating golems! Jamous's first golem was a simple machine that merely locked his doors at nightfall. Jamous was so proud of his achievement! Bragging about it to both family and friends. Later, Jamous went in search of a metalsmith and gadgetteer who could help him build even more complex machines. Soon, he found Chief Darcus who trained him and apprenticed him, teaching him how to light the forge, create screws,and construct basic machines! All the while, Jamous was continuing to practice Animation! All of his apprenticeship Checks were sent home to his parents, in order to pay them backfor all their hard work. Jamous continually strives to work hard, learn more,and earn money!

[Jamous Azaria]

Skills: Experience: Level:
·Animation ·26SP ·Competent
·Gadgeteering ·11SP + 15RB ·Competent
·Carpenter ·06SP ·Basic
·Metalsmithing ·07SP ·Basic

Ledger:
+100 Gold Miza's

Items:
+Starting package
-Starter cloak, boots, shirt, pants,
-Waterskin
-Backpack
-Food for a week
-Toiletries
-Flint and Steel
+Apartment in Ravok
+Necklace from his parents(Heirloom)

Religion:
Believes in the God Rhysol

Language:
Fluent- Common

Lores:
-Knowledge of Rhysol
-Knowledge of Ravok city layout

[Crosspatch]

Hello there!

I'm Crosspatch, one of the friendly CS Liaisons on Mizahar! I've been looking over your Character Sheet, and I have noticed some minor issues that need to be resolved and fixed. Sadly these need to be done before you can continue roleplaying, so let's take a look at them shall we?

• Can you please check the link to your character sheet, I receive a "404 Not Found" when I click it.
• Although obvious throughout your CS, could you please clearly state your character's gender somewhere?
• 'Ravok' is not a language. In Ravok (and most other places in Mizahar) the people speak Common, which you have chosen as a fluent language. As you know the basic and poor languages are optional, and a full list of available languages can be found here.
• It is required that you clearly state which skills are Starter Package (SP) skills and which are Racial Bonus (RB).
• Out of interest, how did Jamous come about to learn Animation?
• Your missing your two starting lores. A lore is some form of general knowledge that the character has gained over their lifetime. Such as knowledge on a particular deity or knowing the layout of a particular city.
• Is the Necklace from his parents his heirloom? If so please clearly state this.
• Please also list all the starter package items on your CS, these are; 1 Waterskin, 1 Backpack, 1 Set of Toiletries (comb, brush, razor, soap), Food for a week or 1 bottle of embalming fluid (for Nuits), 1 eating knife, Flint & Steel, a simple shirt, simple pants, simple boots, simple undergarments and a simple cloak or coat.
• Ravokians mainly worship Rhysoland love him dearly as their one true deity to worship - See Ravok lore - which leads me to wonder how exactly he came about as an Azenth (or more correctly, a follower of Ivak(with his cult being the Azenth)?
• Ravok is built upon a lake and so does not have any physical land in which to build upon. Most starter package in this city there for consists of a single room apartment (20 x 20, 400 sqft) with a bed, table, a couple chairs, wardrobe, and complimentary chamber pot.

Once these problems have been dealt with, drop me a PM and I'll review this intervention and consider approving your CS for you. Also if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask and I'll do my best to answer!


Crosspatch