[Issues found by Nightmare] pix

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Postby pix on August 15th, 2015, 9:15 pm

Pix

Race: zith
Gender: female
Age: 13
Birthday: 20, summer, 2002
Birthplace: cyphrus

Appearance: pix has long blood red hair and dark red ruby eyes. She is 4'9 and 70 lbs. She is coverd in a layer of dark blue fur and has blood red wings. She wares a red cloak. She is .also very slim
Charector concept:pix is the zith that all ziths think she a wimp and all other races think shes a monster. She hates seeing anyone be torchured, wich is why all zith think shes a wimp. But her mother is one of the most feared zith, wich is why everyone else thinks shes a monster, and they dont even get to know her, becuase shes a zith. Even though shes nice and somewhat shy, she is very sassy. But all she wants is a couple friends




Character History: she was just a little girl when angry humans kidnapped her. They were mad because a few days before her and her mom raided their village and took all their live stock and a bunch of people for food and slaves. The people who were out of town came back and wanted revenge. They saw pix and thought she would be perfect. She was only a little girl. They took her and teid her hands and feet and wings, leaving her defensless. They took her and beat her and tortured her. Luckily, her mom came and found her. They forgot she could speak subsonic and ultrasonic, the language of zith. Her mother killed them but pix was hurt badly. She healed but it took months. Thats why pix doesn't like hurting people, she doesn't want them going through that pain.

Language

Fluent Language: the subsonic and ultrasonic language of zith
Basic Language: english



Skills

Skill EXP Total Proficiency
Archery 5 sp Novice
Racing 10 SP # Novice
Flying 15 RB, +15 SP= 30 # Competent



Lores

Helpful Lores:
Lore of Syliran Geography

Lore of Religion: Tyveth

Possessions

1 Set of Clothing
-Simple Shirt
-Simple Pants
-Simple Undergarments
-Simple Cloak or Coat
-Simple Boots
1 Waterskin
1 Backpack which contains:
-Comb (Wood)
-Brush (Wood)
-Soap
-Razor
-Balanced Rations (1 Week's worth)
-1 eating knife
-Flint & Steel
100 Gold Mizas

Heirloom: her mothers old bow and arows. ( 30 GM)


Housing


Location

Housing. A cute little 20x20 single room cottage (400 sq feet) with a hearth, bunk, chest, chair, and small table.





Ledger

Purchase Cost Total:
Starting +100 GM 100 GM
Cottege - 50GM 50GM
pix
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pix

Postby Nightmare on August 15th, 2015, 11:05 pm

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I don't even know where to begin. Wow.

You need to spend a lot of time reading and try and understand what Mizahar is about. When you do, it will be obvious the countless basic misunderstandings that are present in your character sheet and in your current posts.

Here are some hints to guide you in your reading:
Mizahar has nothing to do with real life, america or earth.
You can't make up your own skills or skill packages when there are established skills already.
You can't make up your own prices for things.
Zith are animalistic, look at the lore and you will see that you are portraying them incorrectly.
The people of Mizahar live in large cities, not villages. Additionally, zith live in the wild, not in cottages.

What you need to do is redo this character sheet. PM me when you have.


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